野草 于 2000/04/05 19:52:02 发表在 汉英
Wed Mar 29 13:25:19 2000
在网上中国白领论坛看到痴心写的“单身情歌”，里头录有一首歌词，蛮有趣，就转贴于此，并附上陋译与大家共享，欢迎批评。没听过这首歌，哪位朋友能介绍一下甚至指示如何可听到它，那就太好了。歌是最难译的，恐怕没有哪首歌译了而不失原汁原味。现在我只求音节多寡与原文不至于相去太远，读起来不至于拗口不象英语。等有机会配上原曲时再来
commit，相应调整改动，争取
enhance 其“可唱度”， 不亦悦乎？：))
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A BACHELOR'S LOVE SONG
- For those who used to be single, are currently single, fear being single, or long for being single:
Love is so elusive to me
Always slipping through my fingers you see
This world has lucky guys everywhere
But why not including me?
A lone fight I fight for the sake of love
The pains it's caused I've had enough
This world has lovelorn guys everywhere
And one of these guys is me
(but not the last one, not me!)
Frustrations make me brave for love
I've got to be firm and tough
Every single like me should understand
Never be cowed by pains if you want love
I'll win the loveliest one who'll love me like crazy
To say bye to the Single Club
A cruel one who'll hurt me most but pine for me
To leave a deep scar in me
The lonely guys are everywhere
The happy ones never many
Can't miss the bus and fail again
To leave me forlorn alone
Singing a lone song again
I'll win the loveliest one who'll love me like crazy
To say bye to the Single Club
A cruel one who'll hurt me most but pine for me
To leave a deep scar in me
The lovelorn are everywhere
I can't wait in fear no more
Can't miss the bus and fail again
To leave me forlorn alone
Singing a lone song again
Oh from my true heart I sing this sad bachelor's love song
Who will sing with me along?
“单身情歌” - 献给曾经单身，现在单身、害怕单身和渴望单身的朋友们：
抓不住爱情的我
总是眼睁睁看她溜走
世界上幸福的人到处有
为何不能算我一个
为了爱孤军奋斗
早就吃够了爱情的苦
在爱中失落的人到处有
而我只是其中一个
（而我不是最后一个）
爱要越挫越勇
爱要肯定执着
每一个单身的人得看透
想爱就别怕伤痛
找一个最爱的深爱的相爱的亲爱的人
来告别单身
一个多情的痴情的绝情的无情的人
来给我伤痕
孤单的人那么多
快乐的没有几个
不要爱过了错过了
留下了单身的我
独自唱情歌
找一个最爱的深爱的相爱的亲爱的人
来告别单身
一个多情的痴情的绝情的无情的人
来给我伤痕
伤心的人那么多
我应该勇敢的过
不要爱过了错过了
留下了单身的我
独自唱情歌
这首痴心的真心的伤心的单身情歌
谁与我来和
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Such a singer does not deserve to be single :)
作者：Mrs Shakespeare - 2000/04/06 02:08:44
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Wed Mar 29 20:44:50 2000
In the slaughterhouse of love/They kill only the best--Rumi
"In the slaughterhouse of love
they kill only the best"
Quit the Singles' Club to find your dove
if you don't want to end like the rest
In the world of chances
fate smiles on crazy guys
Stop acting cool but begin your dances
You shall have no more sighs
In the web of games and fun
hides a lady cruel but fair
She awaits till your voice is done
to join you as if from nowhere
So keep singing your love song
till she comes to sing along
Don't lose heart or let your spirit down
your goddess shall descend when mortals are gone
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What a pity, you are a Mrs. already! Oh,
作者：Lotus - 2000/04/06 02:15:28
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Thu Mar 30 02:30:58 2000
you have thus cruelly shattered many bilinguist bachelors' beautiful dreams. Men are timid than women when it
comes to true love, though they tend to be very brave when it only involves physical desire. They are guided by
mind, not heart, and they refuse to get crazy to show they are cool. What a shame! Only when you allow yourself
to be crazy once for a while could you really be yourself and enjoy life, and remember, you have only one life to
live. Love is no crime in any way. Oh, how I wish I were a man, then I would allow myself to get madly crazy
about you, be you Mrs. Shakespeare, or Mrs. Clinton, you are you, my sweet heart;)
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correction:
作者：Lotus - 2000/04/06 02:17:00
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Thu Mar 30 02:36:56 2000
...they refuse to be crazy, they want to be cool...
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It's important to be cool, anyway!
作者：北美 - 2000/04/06 02:18:00
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Thu Mar 30 10:42:09 2000
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It is more important to be cool or crazy
作者：xy - 2000/04/06 02:18:50
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Thu Mar 30 10:53:13 2000
at the right time and right place.
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谢谢野草君的歌。。。
作者：渔夫 - 2000/04/06 02:10:18
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Wed Mar 29 21:54:59 2000
席慕容的爱是失败的爱，命运和勇气都不曾青睐。万般的凄美，万般的无奈。
男孩子又何曾不是如此呢。
等车的女孩
回眸一瞥
心
已知道
我别无选择
爱
苏醒在
多雨的夏夜
雨帘下漂浮着
一朵
绽开的红伞
伞下是你
盈盈的笑眼
永恒的一瞬
一瞬的永恒
夜
带走了
雨中的倩影
你
带走了
雨后的彩虹
唯有淡淡茉莉
在风中
明日可会重逢
无缘的今夜啊
一缕相思
万点繁星
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历史的经验值得注意
作者：红伞 - 2000/04/06 02:20:25
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Thu Mar 30 03:53:30 2000
可爱的男孩子，命运不青睐，无奈；勇气呢，可是你自己的事儿了:-)
你那
不可抗拒的一瞥
唤醒了
我的主人
心中
朦胧的爱
我感觉到
她的心的悸颤
你没有看到吗
那红色的伞
在无端地发抖
你没有看到吗
她那盈盈的笑眼中
是晶莹的泪珠
她错过
一辆又一辆的车
只为等你走过来
但你终于没有
带着莫名的激动
莫名的失落
她无奈地上了
最后一班车
待她
不再 青涩
不忧 亦不惧
返回那车站
车站依旧
人已去
只剩那
永恒的一瞬
一瞬的永恒
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细雨夏夜红伞，彩虹倩影车站，Alas! 怎当她临去秋波那一转
作者：clown - 2000/04/06 02:23:23
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Thu Mar 30 08:17:22 2000
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I did try to put that Autumn Wave somethere as the girl
作者：红伞 - 2000/04/06 02:26:04
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Thu Mar 30 09:05:12 2000
gets on the bus but failed. It is a very important part of the poem, without it, something is missing. I would
appreciate very much if you could put it somewhere. I am no poet, you know that. I enjoyed your excellent
translation of Fisherman's poem. Your very name promises an excellent piece of work, like a famous brand
promises quality ;)
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A free rendering of your red umbrella
作者：clown - 2000/04/06 02:27:30
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Thu Mar 30 18:51:39 2000
你那
不可抗拒的一瞥
唤醒了
我的主人
心中
朦胧的爱
我感觉到
她的心的悸颤
你没有看到吗
那红色的伞
在无端地发抖
你没有看到吗
她那盈盈的笑眼中
是晶莹的泪珠
她错过
一辆又一辆的车
只为等你走过来
但你终于没有
带着莫名的激动
莫名的失落
她无奈地上了
最后一班车
待她
不再 青涩
不忧 亦不惧
返回那车站
车站依旧
人已去
只剩那
永恒的一瞬
一瞬的永恒
That irresistable glance
of yours
kindled
my mistress' breast
hazy with smoke
I could feel
flames burning
from under her cloak
Did you fail to see
the quivering ribs
of an umbrella red
Didn't you notice
large drops of tears
held in those pearls' shed
Missing her bus one by one
she stood just here
waiting for another glimpse of you
that never did appear
Darkness descended
Time went fast
Disappointed and lost
she got on the last
Today at the same spot
all is but past
except, alas,
that amorous glance
you carelessly cast
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Wonderful! especially the last few lines which made
作者：红伞 - 2000/04/06 02:29:58
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Fri Mar 31 02:34:38 2000
my heart beat faster. I like 细雨夏夜红伞，彩虹倩影车站，Alas! 怎当她临去秋波那一转
very much, beautiful rhythm as in classic Chinese poems. The last line is witty and naughty, turning the whole
atmosphere charged with nostalgic sentiment into a more light-hearted self-ridicule. 好洒脱，好俏皮，so typical
of you. Expressions like that are so typically Chinese, I don't know how to translate them into good English, here
are some more examples: 为情所苦，为情所累，任性，撒娇，赌气，清高
I would appreciate very much if you could help me to put these ideas into English. Thanks in advance.
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Thanks for your kind words! Hope these won't disappoint you
作者：clown - 2000/04/06 02:31:44
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Fri Mar 31 19:48:12 2000
too much:
好洒脱 How cool!
好俏皮 How witty!
为情所苦 a matyr to love, consumed with love,
为情所累 love's slave
任性 wilful, spoilt brat
撒娇 play sweet wiles, coquettish
赌气 in a huff, in pique (She got furious with her husband and huffed off to her parents' home)
清高 aloof, pure and lofty, unsmirched lily, immaculate lotus:)
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Thank you very much, these words might
作者：红伞 - 2000/04/06 02:32:50
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come in handy someday for my mistress.
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Thank you for the poem. I enjoyed it very much.
作者：渔夫 - 2000/04/06 02:24:28
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Thu Mar 30 20:48:38 2000
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Girl Waiting for the Bus
作者：tian xin - 2000/04/06 02:21:36
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Thu Mar 30 07:50:33 2000
Girl Waiting for the Bus
She turned her head
just one glance
my heart
knew
I had no choice
Love
awoke
on this drenched summer night
Beneath the streamers of rain
bloomed
an umbrella scarlet red
and under that
your brimming eyes
An eternal moment
A moment of eternity
Night
took away
the shimmering shadow
in the rain
The rainbow
went with you
Only a vague fragrance
of jasmine
stays
in the wind
Are we to meet again
when morning comes?
Tonight slipped its moorings
but for
one thread of longing
and a sky of spangled stars
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为人民服务
作者：红伞 - 2000/04/06 02:35:02
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Thu Mar 30 09:34:27 2000
译文部分错进去一块，并非有意，不知为什么，就这样吧！
等车的女孩
Girl Waiting for the Bus
回眸一瞥
心
已知道
我别无选择
爱
苏醒在
多雨的夏夜
She turned her head
just one glance
my heart
knew
I had no choice
Love
awoke
on this drenched summer night
雨帘下漂浮着
一朵
绽开的红伞
伞下是你
盈盈的笑眼
Beneath the streamers of rain
bloomed
an umbrella scarlet red
and under that
your brimming eyes
永恒的一瞬
一瞬的永恒
An eternal moment
A moment of eternity
夜
带走了
雨中的倩影
你
带走了
雨后的彩虹
唯有淡淡茉莉
在风中
Night
took away
the shimmering shadow
in the rain
The rainbow
went with you
Only a vague fragrance
of jasmine
stays
in the wind
明日可会重逢
无缘的今夜啊
一缕相思
万点繁星
Are we to meet again
when morning comes?
Tonight slipped its moorings
but for
one thread of longing
and a sky of spangled stars
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红娘姐姐辛苦。
作者：tian xin - 2000/04/06 02:37:30
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Thu Mar 30 17:45:08 2000
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???.........!!!
作者：渔夫 - 2000/04/06 02:42:45
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Thu Mar 30 21:17:52 2000
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Sorry! 顺口开了个玩笑
作者：tian xin - 2000/04/06 02:45:13
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Thu Mar 30 21:38:12 2000
受红伞“历史经验”中：
我的主人
心中
朦胧的爱
诗句和clown从《西厢》中偷来的“临去秋波那一转”启发:)
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哼！白白欢喜了二十一分钟。
作者：渔夫 - 2000/04/06 02:46:16
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Fri Mar 31 11:04:42 2000
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How dare you!
作者：渔婆 - 2000/04/06 02:47:08
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Fri Mar 31 11:17:10 2000
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自作多情空欢喜，哈哈，
作者：黄伞 - 2000/04/06 02:48:14
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Sat Apr 1 03:46:31 2000
自作多情空欢喜，哈哈
赶快回家认错去，嘻嘻
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How could you be so sure!
作者：Yingying - 2000/04/06 02:49:04
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Mon Apr 3 05:12:08 2000
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其实好不情愿see you two together,无奈倾慕终于战胜了吃醋;)
作者：红伞 - 2000/04/06 02:43:50
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Fri Mar 31 03:40:29 2000
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Let's make it look more like a poem of mine
作者：席慕蓉 - 2000/04/06 02:50:47
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Fri Mar 31 04:28:39 2000
其实
好不情愿
see you two
together
无奈
倾
慕
终于战胜了
吃
醋
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Thank you for the translation. As always, it's wonderful.
作者：渔夫 - 2000/04/06 02:36:14
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Thu Mar 30 20:46:52 2000
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That't good attitude! Every single bilinguist should keep a
作者：xy - 2000/04/06 02:11:54
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Thu Mar 30 04:33:16 2000
copy of it as a reminder when he is at his weak moment. I am sure with such healthy crazy attitude, there will soon
be no more bilinguist bachelors around on the forum for us ladies to dream about:-) Good luck, brothers:-)
Witty rendering, my Wild Grass Brother! I enjoyed it very very much! Never mind if it is " loyal" to the original, as
long as the translated version is good, humorous, appealing to the reader. Actually your Chinese version is even
better than the original. Excellent work! I am very proud to have a brother like you!
BTW , Have you read a sort of book review by Li Guotao on the Wild Grass? It is very good; it is an old book,
published in the early 80s.
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Thanks for your encouraging and pleasing response, dear
作者：野草 - 2000/04/06 02:52:55
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Thu Mar 30 15:46:05 2000
XY, Fisher, Mrs. Shakespeare, Sweetheart, RedUmbrella, Clown, Lotus & all other cyber-friends. With a
post-bachelor's degree earned ages ago, I sometimes can't help marvelling at the bitter-sweetness found only in
bachelorship - the freedom, the wild fantacy, the never-ending quest for perfection, ... Aware now that there is
nothing perfect in this real world, I'm just trying to empathize, I guess. That's probably why the Bachelor's Love
Song caught my attention and I felt urged to put it in English. Do I really want to revert to those "good old days",
though? I'm afraid not, because ... Hahaha :( I can't be CRAZY no more!
Who is it that analogized marriage to a fortress with those imprisoned within trying to force their way out while
those without trying to squeeze their way in? Master Qian Zhongshu? I like that analogy. It's certainly true in most
cases.
Dear XY, thanks again for your heart-warming kind words. I'm proud of you, too, Sis - if I may call you so. I've
never heard of any Li Guotao, though. Excuse my ignorance. I seem to have been cut off from that part of the
world now and find myself so ill-informed and dumb. Having been in North America for over a decade now, I
may no longer have the heart and the means to even try to access that kind of stuff any more at this point. But
please don't feel offended or disappointed by my blunt feedback. Deep down in my heart I am grateful to you, for
your enthusiastic support as well as your information.
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If you find the words heart-warming,
作者：XY - 2000/04/06 02:55:15
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Fri Mar 31 03:02:30 2000
it's because they are my heart-felt feelings. If not on the forum, but in private, you will be getting even more
heart-warming words:-), I did enjoy your translation very much, in fact, all your postings. I believe many who read
your posting have felt the same, only they don't speak out like me. I didn't know you are in North America, I
somehow get the idea that you are in Beijing, or Guang Zhou. That is why
我怂恿您泡病号，别急着去上班，哈哈！You have a very muddle-headed sister, are you still proud of her?
I hope you have fully recovered now. Take care, my brother!
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By all means I remain sincerely
作者：野草 - 2000/04/06 02:56:21
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Fri Mar 31 13:27:19 2000
proud of you my YEEEE-MEEEEIII-ZI! Though not entirely out of the woods yet, I feel physically all right now.
Thanks. BTW, I never took any Vitamin C as advised, though.:-)
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AT the Forum, my no-more-single sister!
作者：Last Hermit - 2000/04/06 02:54:03
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Sat Apr 1 07:30:24 2000
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Yes, AT not On the Forum, thank you, my teacher brother!
作者：xy - 2000/04/06 02:57:28
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Wed Apr 5 10:53:47 2000
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不用谢。我只是染上吹毛求疵的癖好罢了！
作者：Last Hermit - 2000/04/06 02:58:18
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Wed Apr 5 12:09:49 2000
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这里好热闹！刚刚找到你们！
作者：北 美 - 2000/04/06 02:12:53
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Thu Mar 30 10:39:26 2000
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Your posting have received such enthusiastic response, even
作者：Wonder - 2000/04/06 02:13:59
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Fri Mar 31 04:19:06 2000
at this dark moment when many netters could not get on to the forum, I wonder if it has something to do with the
season, apart from your wonderful translation. Spring, 春，in Chinese, this particular season has always been
associated with the feelings between men and women. Like 春心荡漾，怀春等等。You used 迎春到 in the
title too. It's been great fun. Let's 春心荡漾，尽享人生:-)
人生难得几荡漾，能荡漾时且荡漾，呵呵。。。It has been more like a cozy chatting corner for close
friends than academic discussion among solemn looking scholars. Enjoyed it very much. Thank you.
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