请教 于 2000/07/29 21:58:46 发表在 汉英
这两天尝试译了篇短文, 无奈水平有限,特烦请各位指. 多谢.
尊敬的各位朋友：
当您来到古老而具有现代气息的成都时，当您领略巴山蜀水、峨眉秀色时，可曾听说位于成都西南方向相距仅280公里处有一个古老而神奇的地方--海螺沟冰川森林公园。海螺沟冰川森林公园是海拔7556米的贡嘎山主峰区东坡的冰蚀河谷，系青藏高原 边缘横断山系高山峡谷。它以世界同纬度海拔最低、活动性最强、冰川地貌最完整等 特点而胜于高海拔的美国阿拉斯加冰川公园和加拿大克努克冰川公园。
Dear friends, when you come to the historic and modern Chengdu, when you are enjoying the pleasure of visiting the mountains and waters of Sichuan, the elegance of Mount. E'mei, have you heard Hailuogou National Glacier Forest Park, which is an ancient and magic land that only 280 km southwest from Chengdu? The park is a glacial-eclipsed valley on the east slope of the highest peaks area of Mount. Gongga, which is 7556 meters in altitude. It is an alpine barranca of Hengduan Mountain System, which is the edge of Qinghai-Tibet Plateau. It boasts three characters: it is the lowest altitude glacier in the same latitude glaciers; with high activity, and with the most integrity of glaciered landform. These characters make Hailuogou even better than glacier parks in Alaska of United States and Canada.
海螺沟冰川形成于1600万年前，是世界不可多得的自然遗产。当您置身于冰川之中，你无时不为自然界的鬼斧神工而感叹。古老而神秘的原始 森林，种类繁多的"动物王国"，名扬中外的'海螺杜鹃"，多姿多彩的瀑布、温泉， 如情似梦的人间瑶池，叹为观止的'海螺树石恋'，泼墨山下的'神话世界", "日照金山"，神秘莫测的'碌海冰川"，凌空垂挂的"大冰瀑布"，海螺沟的十大景观将向您展示她的无穷魅力。它是"蜀山之王"贡嘎山捧出的问鼎画卷，它是康巴高 原上的旅游珍宝，一颗闪烁着五彩神光的明珠。
亲爱的朋友们，海螺沟冰川摔起洁白的哈达，贡嘎山向你们点头致意。热烈欢迎你和你的朋友前来观光、旅游、度假。
Hailuogou Glacier was formed in 16 million years before, is extremely seldom to be seen in the world. When you put yourself into such uncanny workmanship of the nature, what you can do is just exclamation. Hailuogou has ten main scenes: mysterious primary forest, various kinds of animals, world-famous Hailuo azalea, versatile waterfalls and hot springs, the headiness of Jasper Lake on earth, matchless "Tree-Stone Love in Hailuogou ", wonderland at the foot of Mount. Pomo, the Sunshine Golden Mountain, mysterious "Luhai Glacier", hanging "Giant Icefall". The ten main scenes will show you their endless charming. Hailuogou is the best paintings presented by Mountain Gongga, the "king of Sichuan's Mountains". It is also a travel treasure, a bright pearl on the Kangba Plateau.
Dear friends, Hailuogou is raising her pure-white Hada, and the Mount. Gongga is complimenting to you. They are inviting you! So, you, and your friends, come Hailuogou for lionizing, traveling or vacation!
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一时手痒, here is my attempt on part of the second paragraph.
作者：The Yeti - 2000/07/29 23:11:13
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Hailuogou Glacier, formed 16 million years ago, is one of the rarest natural
wonders of the world. When you see this glacial formation, you cannot help but marvelled at
the elaborated handiwork of nature.
The ten major attractions of Hailuogou are : The mysterious primal forest; the
Animal Kingdom with its large collection of specimens (note 1)
; the world famous Hailuo azelea (? capital Azelea ??); colourful waterfall and
hot springs; the romantic Jasper Lake; the breathlessly beautiful (note 2)"Tree-Stone
Love of Hailuogou"; the "Wonderland"(?? no idea what this is!!) at the foot of Mount Pomo (???) ; the Golden
Mountain bath in the glory of sunlight; the mysterious and alluring Luhai Glacier
and last but not least, the magnificent " Giant Hanging Icefall". The charm of these
ten memorable displays will no double linger in your minds long after your
visits. (or: long after your departure.)
(note 1: (or : large and exotic
collection, if indeed there are exotic animals there.)
(note 2: Is this a fossilized tree ? If so, may be we
can say "fossilized tree formation known as "The Tree-Stone Love of Hailuogou.)
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谢指教，那第一、三段呢？
作者：请指教 - 2000/07/30 02:33:53
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OK, first , some disclaimer...
作者：The Yeti - 2000/07/30 10:08:15
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I am not a good translator, I am doing this as if it is a
homework exercise assigned by auntie XY and her "small-friends"
class. I can never write a sentence with less than 3 mistakes
in spelling, grammar and punctuation. So read this with
a healthy dose of salt.
I am using the 3 geological terms suggested by "a geologist".
So here goes nothing..
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Dear Friends,
When you come to visit the old historic city of Chengdou, which is now
very much revitalized and modernized, you will enjoy the famous scenic beauty of the moutains and lakes of Sichuan and E'mei moutains. But
do you know that situationed just 280 km south west of Chengdou there is
and ancient and enchanted place known as the Hailougou National Glacial Park?
Let me tell you something about this place.
Hailougou Park is a glacier eroded valley situated at an altitude of 7556 meters
on the eastern slope of of the principle peak of the Gongga Mountain chain. It is
an alpine gorge located in the Hengduan Range, at the edge of the Qinghai-Tibet Plateau.
Three distinct characteristics make it surpass similar glacier parks in Alsaka, USA, and Canada : the lowest altitude glacier in the same latitude
as other glaciers in the world; ( high geological activity)(not sure what the 活动性最强
refers to); and the best formed glacier with the least erosion (?? just guessing).
(End of the second paragraph which I omitted previously)
Hailougou is like a gift of an exquiste painting presented by Mount Gongga, the "King of Sichuan's Mountain",
It is a jewel of the Plateau of Tibet; a rare treasure to be discovered by travellers
(or tourists).
Paragrph 3:
I don't know the meaning of 洁白的哈达， so I won't try working out this paragraph. I will
leave it to the real experts on this forum.
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OK, first , some disclaimer...
作者：The Yeti - 2000/07/30 10:09:10
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I am not a good translator, I am doing this as if it is a
homework exercise assigned by auntie XY and her "small-friends"
class. I can never write a sentence with less than 3 mistakes
in spelling, grammar and punctuation. So read this with
a healthy dose of salt.
I am using the 3 geological terms suggested by "a geologist".
So here goes nothing..
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Dear Friends,
When you come to visit the old historic city of Chengdou, which is now
very much revitalized and modernized, you will enjoy the famous scenic beauty of the moutains and lakes of Sichuan and E'mei moutains. But
do you know that situationed just 280 km south west of Chengdou there is
and ancient and enchanted place known as the Hailougou National Glacial Park?
Let me tell you something about this place.
Hailougou Park is a glacier eroded valley situated at an altitude of 7556 meters
on the eastern slope of of the principle peak of the Gongga Mountain chain. It is
an alpine gorge located in the Hengduan Range, at the edge of the Qinghai-Tibet Plateau.
Three distinct characteristics make it surpass similar glacier parks in Alsaka, USA, and Canada : the lowest altitude glacier in the same latitude
as other glaciers in the world; ( high geological activity)(not sure what the 活动性最强
refers to); and the best formed glacier with the least erosion (?? just guessing).
(End of the second paragraph which I omitted previously)
Hailougou is like a gift of an exquiste painting presented by Mount Gongga, the "King of Sichuan's Mountain",
It is a jewel of the Plateau of Tibet; a rare treasure to be discovered by travellers
(or tourists).
Paragrph 3:
I don't know the meaning of 洁白的哈达， so I won't try working out this paragraph. I will
leave it to the real experts on this forum.
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I told you so ! Found a mistake already : situated, not situationed. I think I better go hide somewhere.
作者：The Yeti - 2000/07/30 10:10:56
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再挑两根刺^_&
作者：Last Hermit - 2000/07/30 11:13:27
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1）I am doing this as if it WAS/WERE...
2）the old, historic...
3）E'mei Mountains
Neither am I a good translator. I would like to leave it to the real experts AT this forum.
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Meunique
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Re: 鬼斧神工 The word "intricacy" is probably more appropiate than "elaborate"
作者：The Yeti - 2000/08/01 14:22:35
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" marvelled at the intricacy of nature's handiwork".
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Correction by my wife: should use the word petrified for wood turning into stone.
作者：The Yeti - 2000/07/30 08:43:17
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a few terms for your reference
作者：a geologist - 2000/07/29 23:25:21
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冰蚀河谷 glaciated valley, glacier eroded valley
横断山系 Hengduan Range
青藏高原 Plateau of Tibet
And I'm afraid "Kangba Plateau" would be quite confusing. You may want to replace it with "Plateau of Tibet."
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先挑两根刺^)^
作者：Last Hermit - 2000/07/30 11:27:49
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1）“古老而具有现代气息的成都”似乎应译为“the old yet modernized Chengdu”或“the Chengdu of a mixture of old history and modernization”？
2）“可曾听说”应为“have you EVER heard OF”
3）that IS only 280 km...
4）“它以世界同纬度海拔最低、活动性最强、冰川地貌最完整等特点而胜于高海拔的美国阿拉斯加冰川公园和加拿大克努克冰川公园”是否为“以同等纬度来看，它是海拔最低、最活跃、冰川地貌最完整的冰川森林公园，使位于高海拔的美国阿拉斯加冰川公园和加拿大克努克冰川公园无以匹敌”？
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I like your version of "a mixture of old history and modernization" and...
作者：The Yeti - 2000/07/30 22:10:23
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thanks for pointing out the errors. There are a few other errors
such as "an" instead of "and" etc...
BTW, I used some of the terms supplied by the original translator
since I had no idea what the official names of these places are.
I suspect that if we call 人间瑶
池 "bathing pool of the goddesses" instead of Jasper Lake we might
attract a lot more male tourists :-) !
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