这些名词如何译好？拙译是否太富于佛教色彩？

　　Long before I've travailed the length of the book I feel I could name all the topographical features in the series, as if I were standing in front of the pictures with a gazetteer in my hands. "The one of these Castels is named The-power-of-the-devils-assaulting, the second The-forsaking-of-hope, the third is named Feare-of-death...These Hills are named Taken-on-witt-or-prudence, Riches-of-the-spirit, Learned-knowledge, Taken-on-fredom, Goodthinking-prophecie, Zeale-after-chossen-holynes, Counterfeit-righteousness, New Invented-humilitee, Pryde-in-ones-owne-spiritualnes, Unmyndful-of-any-better," etc. And those unseasonably early swimmers in the Merrymakers must be plunging into A-delyte-in-the-pleasures-of-the-flesh--the daungerous Ryver wherin so many Travaillers be drowned and choaked.

　　拙译：
　　我还没蹇步走到这本书的尽头，便觉得自己可以将组画里的地势特色一一数将出来，仿佛我就站在画的跟前、手拿着一本地名词典似的。"一古堡曰'魔袭'，其二曰'心死'，其三曰'畏死'……山名曰'慎心'、'盈心'、'智心'、'宕心'、'觉心'、'得道丹心'、'伪德心'、'假虚心'、'得志圣心'、'己不留心'，"等等。而在《嬉》里，那些离奇地早出来游泳的人，定是一头扎进了那条不知淹死呛死多少旅者的危河"肉欲乐"里了

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